There some truly substantive improvements here, and nothing that’s a step back, so bravo!
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Author - Nathan
The upside-down watermark says “[something] Collectibles” — I assume it’s part of the sword photo that was swiped from eBay or something.
“And then my stock model folder EXPLODED!” (Bonus: A cursive font should at least make a good-faith effort at connecting the letters.)
A few distinct improvements, some lateral “why bother” moves, and a couple of jarring steps backward.
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Everyone here imrpoved at least a little bit. That’s something, right?
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Gallantry in Action (Halberd Book 1)
It’s a novel of adventure in the Interplanetary Commonwealth. But you could tell, right?